http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/2009/11/excerpt-from-the-first-vial-an-inconvenient-woman/ The Showcase for Fiction Writers Thu, 02 Feb 2012 14:22:23 -0500 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/2009/11/excerpt-from-the-first-vial-an-inconvenient-woman/comment-page-1/#comment-33 linnea Mon, 16 Nov 2009 16:56:53 +0000 http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/?p=329#comment-33 Thanks for having a look. Jerry - I'll try and fix the change of scene. Yes, this is a hint to the reader that the plague has reached Claringdon. The villagers still aren't aware of it though. Brenda - Poor Constance is right. My next excerpt is the priest choosing her replacement. Thanks for having a look.
Jerry – I’ll try and fix the change of scene. Yes, this is a hint to the reader that the plague has reached Claringdon. The villagers still aren’t aware of it though.
Brenda – Poor Constance is right. My next excerpt is the priest choosing her replacement.

]]> http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/2009/11/excerpt-from-the-first-vial-an-inconvenient-woman/comment-page-1/#comment-30 Brenda Mon, 16 Nov 2009 02:44:52 +0000 http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/?p=329#comment-30 Poor Constance! One can only hope that the evil Father Simon comes to a bad end. The scene change was fine for me the way it is written. Poor Constance! One can only hope that the evil Father Simon comes to a bad end. The scene change was fine for me the way it is written.

]]> http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/2009/11/excerpt-from-the-first-vial-an-inconvenient-woman/comment-page-1/#comment-27 Jerry Sun, 15 Nov 2009 12:56:33 +0000 http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/?p=329#comment-27 Intriguing. The start of the great plague? You might improve readability a bit by signaling a change of scene. See The Touch as an example. Intriguing. The start of the great plague? You might improve readability a bit by signaling a change of scene. See The Touch as an example.

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