Comments on: Excerpt: War Eagles – Chapter 4 – Free Fall

By: carolrzadkiewicz

carolrzadkiewicz — Mon, 16 Nov 2009 21:20:56 +0000

I was immediately impressed with the author’s descriptions of the dogfight. He has done his homework! I also liked the “twist” when the dogfight turns out to be only a dream, but one Brandt wishes would become reality. Finally, the author’s writing is tight, the narration realistic, and the character well-developed and, therefore, realistic.

By: Brenda

Brenda — Mon, 16 Nov 2009 02:51:46 +0000

I like this action-packed beginning. This promises to be a real page-turner. I’m looking forward to reading more. The current paragraph divisions work well.

By: cfmacek

cfmacek — Sat, 14 Nov 2009 12:01:22 +0000

thank you for your comments on styling the text – originally I tried to put indents to identify the paragraphs but for some reason they didn’t show up. I took your advice and added physical space between paragraphs – I had difficulty in separating the last paragraph (not italicized) from the others. BTW – my original text was cut and pasted from a word document and not composed in the wordpress platform – would that make a difference?

By: admin

admin — Sat, 14 Nov 2009 11:37:38 +0000

I like the “unexpected” twist of waking from a dream of certain death.

The excerpt would be more appealing if you open it up a bit by paragraphing. Go into the edit screen and hit your “enter” key while in the visual tab, or in the HTML tab. Could also insert

in the HTML tab where you want a paragraph.

By: Jack Archer -giant killer

Jack Archer -giant killer — Sat, 14 Nov 2009 01:47:23 +0000

It seems interesting, I like it ’cause i love the war stories, and i’ll be awaiting for the next chapter.