Comments on: After the Concert http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/2010/02/after-the-concert/ The Showcase for Fiction Writers Thu, 02 Feb 2012 14:22:23 -0500 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 By: michelle http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/2010/02/after-the-concert/comment-page-1/#comment-191 michelle Tue, 02 Mar 2010 15:36:28 +0000 http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/?p=1172#comment-191 I like it. The twist at the end was a little unexpected. I like how Jim is a war veteran and a musician. I like how the narration shows us Jim's memories although it's in third person. And I like your choice of music. I like it. The twist at the end was a little unexpected. I like how Jim is a war veteran and a musician. I like how the narration shows us Jim’s memories although it’s in third person. And I like your choice of music.

]]> By: Jerry http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/2010/02/after-the-concert/comment-page-1/#comment-190 Jerry Fri, 26 Feb 2010 12:12:12 +0000 http://www.fictionwritersplatform.net/?p=1172#comment-190 I liked everything about it. Poignant story, a twist at the end that I didn't see coming until the last few sentences. The story leaves me wondering whether this is a dream of Jim's, or Edie has been dead for some time and Jim dies during the performance, or Edie dies just before Jim, perhaps having been in the hospital or ill at home. I like a story that feels good, touches an emotion or two, and leaves me pondering the possible explanations/outcomes. Well done! I liked everything about it. Poignant story, a twist at the end that I didn’t see coming until the last few sentences. The story leaves me wondering whether this is a dream of Jim’s, or Edie has been dead for some time and Jim dies during the performance, or Edie dies just before Jim, perhaps having been in the hospital or ill at home. I like a story that feels good, touches an emotion or two, and leaves me pondering the possible explanations/outcomes.

Well done!

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