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Adventure | Sci-Fi/Fantasy | Short Story

What goes round...

I regarded it in an abstract way, my mind wandering. I heard myself saying: ‘well this is another fine mess you’ve gotten me into, Stanley.’ And I was back beside an old man, in a hospital bed he would never leave. His face, beaming with joy, as we played Stan and Olly, laughing uproariously to looks of stern rebuke. I whispered, ‘What would you say if you could see me now, Dad?’

Coming back to the present, I tried to make sense of what was happening, working out what to do next. My mind still wandering, it was hard to concentrate. How could I make myself as comfortable as maybe, while I waited for someone to find me?

I came to again and took stock. My first aid kit, food and worst of all, my emergency beacon and communicator, were all in my pack. Which was probably buried somewhere at the bottom of the slide.

But, first priority, what about my leg?

I had lost quite a bit of blood, but the flow had nearly stopped, so I cut up my shirt to make some rough bandages and bound it up as best I could. That would have to do for now.

I looked around to form a better idea of where I was and what possibility there was of finding some shelter. Any shelter.

I was lying at the edge of the scree, up against a large buttress of the rough red sandstone that formed the backbone of the surrounding uplands. At the bottom of the buttress a small overhang promised shelter in the event of rain. I could not see under the overhang owing to a large bush or small tree that grew there. ‘Oh well, beggars can’t be choosers’ I thought, relapsing into time worn clichés; ‘nothing ventured, nothing gained’, and I slowly and painfully worked my way over 10 metres or so, to the promise of shelter.

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Author: JohnMakin (1 Articles)

JohnMakin

I started work fitting tyres on anything from wheelbarrows to earth-movers. Then I became a software engineer, from correcting programs to designing and building systems. In contrast to that rather sedentary occupation, my outside interests were essentially practical, learning to a level of competency any skill that opportunity presented. From cooking, knitting and gardening to building dry stone walls, wood-working and rock climbing. I retired early following a mountaineering accident. As a part of my recovery I found that trying to write what I felt, resulted in poetry. Collected into a small book, self published but never distributed. Then I wrote a fantasy novel, printed it and hand bound it - just to feel how it was done. I then became interested in the whole arena of writing and am now returning to that first effort and rewriting it with more insight into what I am doing. I am learning all the time, writing when-ever and where-ever the opportunity presents itself. The benefits that accrue from accepting the advice inherent in reviews are immense, if one has the humility to weigh them and accept rather than deny what they are saying. I acknowledge that I am a mere tyro compared to the majority on here but trust that you will look kindly upon my desire to develop my skills.

4 comments to What goes around…

  • Took me a while to read but was definitely worth it. A very good one John. I thoroughly enjoyed each of those 35 pages, even though as a rule I don’t like “reading” Sci-Fi but rather wqtch it. Here is one exception to the rule :)

    Keep it up. :)

  • Hello John,

    This first part of your story is interesting. Well written and I especially like the way you’ve described the bank on the first paragraph. Looking forward to reading the following chapters. Cheers.

    Punitha

  • Thank you Brenda, well spotted, comma removed.
    John.

  • Brenda Brenda

    An intriguing beginning! One suggestion: Remove the comma from “Like being on the inside of a tumble dryer, full of stones.” I am imagining that the poor prospector has had a dinner of stones before tumbling down the mountain!

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