Comments for Fiction Writers' Platform

Comment on Puppy Love by Doris Mawyer

Doris Mawyer — Wed, 17 Mar 2010 12:57:13 +0000

What a wonderful story! Loved the characters. I was surprised to discover it was not a YA story, but so much the better! A little twist kept me interested right to the end.

Comment on Bubbleator 2010 – 2044 by Brenda

Brenda — Fri, 12 Mar 2010 21:36:32 +0000

Karen,

I made it more than half-way, but then I lost interest. There is a great deal of fabulous imagination here, and but it’s way too much,too fast in this presentation. This could generate quite a few fascinating stories if you were to deconstruct it and repackage it into shorter doses.

Comment on Bubbleator 2010 – 2044 by Jerry

Jerry — Fri, 12 Mar 2010 21:18:54 +0000

I had a very difficult time assimilating all the new terminology introduced and relating new terms to things I know or can imagine. That, for me, made the story line very, very difficult to follow.

Comment on An Avuncular Afterword by michelle

michelle — Thu, 11 Mar 2010 16:55:30 +0000

“The Seuss Scrooge” is a nice phrase. I’m all for alliteration.

Comment on Miss Conception by Jerry

Jerry — Tue, 09 Mar 2010 21:37:34 +0000

Well done, with a nice twist at the end. Some interesting dialogue spread throughout with intriguing philosophical and ethical implications.

Comment on Asharif the boatman by Brenda

Brenda — Tue, 09 Mar 2010 15:12:03 +0000

Another fine story. Could any of the society people ever be wise, or would that complicate the story too much? There is a definite similarity to Christianity here. Must we always kill our prophets? Interesting.

Comment on Miss Conception by Brenda

Brenda — Tue, 09 Mar 2010 15:03:55 +0000

A very thought-provoking fable, indeed.

Comment on Asharif the boatman by michelle

michelle — Mon, 08 Mar 2010 21:34:57 +0000

I started wondering what this story was really about while reading it, and I also found a bit of Jesus in there. Your characterization is quite nice, the descriptive paragraphs making the reader feel for the protagonist.

Comment on Asharif the boatman by PhilipBradbury

PhilipBradbury — Mon, 08 Mar 2010 08:46:04 +0000

Thank you, Jerry, and the ending surptised me when I wrote it! I had planned for quite a different ending and,as I was about to carry on, something inside said to turn left and finish it right there, this way! As usual, I did what I was told!

Comment on Asharif the boatman by Jerry

Jerry — Sun, 07 Mar 2010 20:02:42 +0000

Oh, this is good. The kind of story that you finish and then start wondering if it was really about A, or B, or maybe C? A bit of Jesus, a touch of Kahlil (did I spell that correctly?).